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Strong
A word I didn't know the meaning of
Not until you held me in your arms
Not until I felt your breath on my face
And the beat of your heart in my ear

Strong
A word that had no meaning
'Til I saw the mask you wear shatter
And for once I saw the person that was inside
A person with weakness but so much more strength

Strong
A word without meaning
Until you wiped away my tears
Until you let me cry as you held me tight
Until I sobbed into your chest only to have you pull me back together

Strong
You are my strength
You are my power
You are my weakness
You are my everything

For you I will be strong
Alright this is being written like now I mean for once I don't have it copied into a notebook so that I can then copy it onto the computer. This is just off the top of my head throught of after a few recent events of this weekend.... The person that it's for.. Well he'll never see it... well maybe he will time will be the answer to that...

Comment and Critique please

And is it me or is this my first poem in a really long while?
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PawsforHead Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beatuiful, reminds me of the relationship I'm in right now :) You've got talent my friend.
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xxBlackRosesRedxx Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
This beautiful, I love the emotion behind it, excellent job

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harpyeagle45 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
Awesome! After I read it as a poem, I went back and read it as a song. It works perfectly! A little short for a full song, but this is GREAT!!! :squee:
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orderedXdisorder Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2008
i love this,
it's very poetic.
i really can't think of any critic it would require.
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2008
thanks alot!!
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xhalfxemptyxbloodx Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
*sigh*

i really have no idea why i'm still awake right now.
i probably forgot to say this before, but i do like this poem.
it just has a certain.. sense to it. the importance of it or something. i really don't know. i'm half- conscious, yet i continue to type. :ohmygod:
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
Go to bed hun before you like fall over and hurt yourself or something
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a-forsaken-angel Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
awww very cute and sad at the same time
very very good no critique needed, it's beautiful
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007
Thank you... I ended up giving it to the person that inspired it... he just looked at it and smiled before tucking it away in a pocket... it was so strange...
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a-forsaken-angel Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
awwwwww how sweet
he liked it if he did that (obviously)
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007
:giggle: exactly!!!
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a-forsaken-angel Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
tee hee
:giggle:
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Grim-Grinning Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
I love it! As I was reading the third verse, tears started to form in my eyes because it kind of reminded me of a really close friend. . .
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2007
awww i didn't mean to make you cry!!! I'm glad you like it though!
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Grim-Grinning Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
It's okay ^^ And I'm glad too ^^
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
:glomp:
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Grim-Grinning Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
:hug:
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UnluckyHakkai13 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:hug:
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
:cuddle: I'm gonna give him a copy of this on Monday
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UnluckyHakkai13 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good. It's a very beautiful poem Lauren.
I know he'll appreciate it.
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
I'm not sure what he'll say about it myself... And thank you so faving it!
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UnluckyHakkai13 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcomes! <3
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
:glomp:
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UnluckyHakkai13 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:XD:
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2007
:giggle:
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beltanefire Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
Beautiful words.... it is wonderful.
I really love it. :love:
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
thank you so much!
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beltanefire Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
You deserve it! Your art is beautiful! I wish I could write as good as you.
I try to write song lyrics at the moment and it is really hard work.
So I hold you in high esteem!
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
Well thank you so much! That meanns alot to me. And about the whole writing song lyrics thing, I've found that I can't force myself to write a song, the chous just always pops into my head when I'm not thinking and well of course when i never have a pen and a piece of paper lol.
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beltanefire Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
:D I've noticed that when I hear a song I mostly have directly an idea what to write.
My partner in this music project sent me a track two days ago that sounds a little bit
like music from the middleage. So I wrote some lyrics about a beautiful maid who
met the devil on a silent bosk and fell in love with him. He also sent me a track that remind me
of power, combat and was full of hope. So I wrote a text about our wish to preserve
our (the German and English) culture. I'm not good in writing poems but I think I have
a talent to write lyrics. ;-) I could write a short novel, in fact I tried it out when I made
a description of my character for "Vampire" and I like the story. But I could never find
so wonderful words to describe what I feel like you do. You have an amazing talent!
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
:giggle: :blush: Thank you so much!!!!!!!! :glomp: You're way too nice!! And I'm sure if you tried you could write an amazing story!
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beltanefire Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007
You're welcome! :hug: Stories are not my problem. I wrote some for a friend over
the last few weeks and he liked them. However I'm not able to write something with a
rhyme in it. :-( But I'm sure that it works when I practise it a little bit. I have to write
some more lyrics for the CD we want to produce until October. This should be enough time
to create someting good! :D
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007
GOOD LUCK!!!
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Cursie Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
strong and true words...
very beautifull work :3
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
thank you so much and thanks for the fav
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Cursie Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
absolutely welcome ^^
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
:glomp:
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Cursie Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:hug:
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PyroSikTh Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
It's...Strong

Good poem
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
thank you! Glad you liked it
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Zelthea Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007
That's very good. You have talent.
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
Thank you so much! Thanks for taking the time to read it
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Zelthea Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
My pleasure :)
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DarkNessAroundu Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007
Wow this is really good. Its very powerful and so sincere. Great job.
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007
thanks glad you llike it
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